Aet Lindling

The colons detract from the poem as a whole, I would suggest taking them out. "But i just don't think so !" That's not very good. You don't capitalize "I", ...

You start out with a standard rhyme scheme of ABAB and then only one stanza later switch to a -A-A rhyming scheme, and then no rhyming for the third stanza, ...

Yes, yes it does, Galerius. Obviously. (Since other people have commented on the literary value of this poem, and I haven't done a nitpick in a while, I'll just nitpick ...

Decide whether or not you want this to rhyme. It rhymes in places and doesn't in others. I like the (not dear to me) repetition, it hints at something that ...

Doesn't explain enough. It leaves too much to the imagination, in a bad way. You say that someone left you, and you got all sad, and so on, and then ...

As many people have done, you have fallen into the trap of trying to hard to make your poem rhyme. Rhyme schemes don't always have to be used, most poems ...

This is pretty much exactly what I think whenever I see a robin's egg cracked open on the ground. Pretty cool poem. With that said, there are some parts that ...

You have nice imagery and descriptions, I liked "airy globes", but it seems like you don't go very far with this idea. The ending is a proper ending, don't add ...

This doesn't seem so much like a poem about death as it does an essay. You switch moods around the end, at first you're asking questions and you should find ...

This is a not a joke poem, or a serious poem. It is a half-serious poem. PEZ is awesome. --- PEZ, when I first met you My tastebuds were knocked ...

This has a poor flow to it. You obviously tried to make everything rhyme, and this usually isn't advisable. Rhyming is forced by nature, and unless you can really make ...

On a second reading I found I was kind of fond of this poem. It's got several layers, I actually thought it was about modern, bad, music when I first ...

Nope, I don’t feel it. This is emo poetry, and emo poetry is all fine for pouring out emotion and making you feel better, but it isn’t meant to be ...

A tad late, but hey, I voted.

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